New Poetic Form

Fade to Black

Harmonious chirping bouncing through the air,

The birds sing their song of joy

Bursts of sunlit warmth

Radiating from the fruitful soil

But as the sun sets

The Earth faces turmoil

Singing ceases

Life decreases

The bitter cold wind whistling

Through the inanimate, leaf-barren trees

Grass once green and thriving

Now nothing but a cadaverous, impoverished desert

A wasteland foreign to vivacity

With only the pale yellow sun hanging above.

Given Poetic Form

Ode to Spring

World of color

Life to bloom

Melting away the dead of winter

A new light shines through

Long days of yearning

Long nights of sorrow

Come to an end

The brightness of tomorrow

Excitement

Vibrancy

Contentment

Joy

The song of the birds echo through the trees

Gentle gusts of wind

Whisking away the yesterdays 

With warm rays of sun

The bad now good

The sin now forgiveness

The tears now laughter 

The hurt now comfort

Sadness fleeting

Now, only life.

3 Step Poem

First Draft

Tranquil, peaceful, calm
the warm sand across my feet
Clear, open, vast
cool, salty water against my feet
Scorching sun
Fluffy clouds
My umbrella like a shield around me
protecting me
from the burning sun above
Extravagant blue
Open ocean
Expansive sky
stretching out before me like a map
as I close my eyes
and feel the gentle breeze.

Critiques: I need to choose different adverbs towards the beginning of the poem, rather than "across". Also, I need to change the way I describe the way the water feels, the way the sand feels, etc, as well as describe exactly how the sun feels.

Second Draft 

Tranquil, peaceful, calm
the warm sand between my toes
Clear, open, vast
cool, salty water against my feet like a refreshing breath of clean air
Scorching sun
freckles appear on my nose
Fluffy clouds
My umbrella like a shield around me
protecting me
from the burning sun above
Extravagant blue
Open ocean
Expansive sky
stretching out before me like a map
as I close my eyes
and feel the gentle breeze.

Critiques: Instead of immediately starting off with a description of the beach, I should lead up to it slowly by explaining things that might suggest that I am talking about the beach.

Final Draft

Sighing deeply
Walking towards the direction of the sunshine
eyes closed as I approach the shore
Tranquil, peaceful, calm
the warm sand between my toes
Clear, open, vast
cool, salty water against my feet like a refreshing breath of clean air
Scorching sun
freckles appear on my nose
Fluffy clouds
My umbrella like a shield around me
protecting me
from the burning sun above
Extravagant blue
Open ocean
Expansive sky
stretching out before me like a map
as I close my eyes
and feel the gentle breeze.